Kyoko-_**
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 |  Subject: rain...  Sun Oct 05, 2008 8:58 am | |
| our professor in literature wanted us to write a poem with the topic "rain"with metaphors in it... so, here it is! i haven't passed it yet. it's actually due on the day of our exam. so, please do comment... ^^
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Rain
You sang in this mystical morning
A perfidy that lured my being.
The fog that enveloped your passion
Concealed a trance, a reverie that spared my anguish.
Spare me, oh banshee!
I only ached for lonesomeness to flee.
Spare me, oh banshee!
That voice, an abysmal apathy.
Trickling down my spine, dripping through the echoes…
Stop! Awaken!
And never will I listen to your serenade,
For time will stop, and keep me trapped in this fantasy.
~~~
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Kyoko-_**
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| | Subject: Re: rain... Mon Oct 06, 2008 8:06 am | |
| my roommate thinks so too.... but then i got no other choice because the professor asked us to write only about rain.... T_T | |
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Jsaviers
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| | Subject: Re: rain... Tue Oct 07, 2008 4:18 pm | |
| Well it is good. Deep? No.
But very Beautiful. and considering it was about rain, It is very good. | |
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Kyoko-_**
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| | Subject: Re: rain... Mon Oct 13, 2008 1:07 am | |
| not deep? try looking between the lines savy..... and i didn't mean that literally.. lol! | |
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Digitalis
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| | Subject: Re: rain... Mon Oct 20, 2008 5:55 pm | |
| jsavi, its not deep in emotion exactly, more in meaning and interpretation | |
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Kyoko-_**
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| | Subject: Re: rain... Mon Oct 27, 2008 9:51 am | |
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~xei
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| | Subject: Re: rain... Thu Nov 06, 2008 11:10 am | |
| hhmmm.. reminds me alot of the witch mag. | |
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Kyoko-_**
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| | Subject: Re: rain... Thu Nov 06, 2008 12:07 pm | |
| ^ that's because of the word banshee right? lol! you should check the origin of that word out... it's simply enchanting... ^^ | |
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