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PostSubject: rain...   Sun Oct 05, 2008 8:58 am

our professor in literature wanted us to write a poem with the topic "rain"with metaphors in it... so, here it is! i haven't passed it yet. it's actually due on the day of our exam. so, please do comment... ^^


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Rain


You sang in this mystical morning
A perfidy that lured my being.
The fog that enveloped your passion
Concealed a trance, a reverie that spared my anguish.

Spare me, oh banshee!
I only ached for lonesomeness to flee.
Spare me, oh banshee!
That voice, an abysmal apathy.

Trickling down my spine, dripping through the echoes…
Stop! Awaken!
And never will I listen to your serenade,
For time will stop, and keep me trapped in this fantasy.

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PostSubject: Re: rain...   Sun Oct 05, 2008 11:49 am

huh. this seems to be about more than rain. Smile
its deep, i like it
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PostSubject: Re: rain...   Mon Oct 06, 2008 8:06 am

my roommate thinks so too.... but then i got no other choice because the professor asked us to write only about rain.... T_T

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PostSubject: Re: rain...   Tue Oct 07, 2008 4:18 pm

Well it is good. Deep? No.
But very Beautiful. and considering it was about rain, It is very good.

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PostSubject: Re: rain...   Mon Oct 13, 2008 1:07 am

not deep? try looking between the lines savy..... and i didn't mean that literally.. lol!

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PostSubject: Re: rain...   Mon Oct 20, 2008 5:55 pm

jsavi, its not deep in emotion exactly, more in meaning and interpretation

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PostSubject: Re: rain...   Mon Oct 27, 2008 9:51 am

^ yes yes... ^^

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PostSubject: Re: rain...   Thu Nov 06, 2008 11:10 am

hhmmm.. reminds me alot of the witch mag.
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PostSubject: Re: rain...   Thu Nov 06, 2008 12:07 pm

^ that's because of the word banshee right? lol! you should check the origin of that word out... it's simply enchanting... ^^

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