our professor in literature wanted us to write a poem with the topic "rain"with metaphors in it... so, here it is! i haven't passed it yet. it's actually due on the day of our exam. so, please do comment... ^^


~~~

Rain


You sang in this mystical morning
A perfidy that lured my being.
The fog that enveloped your passion
Concealed a trance, a reverie that spared my anguish.

Spare me, oh banshee!
I only ached for lonesomeness to flee.
Spare me, oh banshee!
That voice, an abysmal apathy.

Trickling down my spine, dripping through the echoes…
Stop! Awaken!
And never will I listen to your serenade,
For time will stop, and keep me trapped in this fantasy.

~~~

my roommate thinks so too.... but then i got no other choice because the professor asked us to write only about rain.... T_T

Well it is good. Deep? No.
But very Beautiful. and considering it was about rain, It is very good.

not deep? try looking between the lines savy..... and i didn't mean that literally.. lol!

jsavi, its not deep in emotion exactly, more in meaning and interpretation

^ yes yes... ^^

hhmmm.. reminds me alot of the witch mag.

^ that's because of the word banshee right? lol! you should check the origin of that word out... it's simply enchanting... ^^